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Category: College Admissions Essays

Zoom to Find Your Fingerprint Story

Over the years, I have been asked hundreds of times what a student can do in order to write a compelling and unique personal statement about a popular or common activity. On the one hand we tell kids to be themselves and write about the things they value most and on the other hand we tell them not to follow the crowd and work hard to craft essays that are the first of their kind! 😉

No matter how popular or common your activity or experience may appear to be on the surface, never forget that the way you experienced it is like a fingerprint. No two experiences are alike.

Take the time to peruse through your memories of the many wonderful, challenging, disappointing or all of the above moments that you lived with this activity (let’s say it is soccer). This may seem overwhelming but being thorough will really help you find the perfect story and you may find it to be quite enjoyable as well.

Once you believe you have catalogued your soccer journey, you will need to decide how close you want to zoom in or out of the topic. When I say zoom in or out try and imagine a time when you went to Google Maps to search or the helicopter view of your house. If you carefully decide how close or far you want to set your zoom position for the map, you will see your house, the car in the driveway and maybe even smaller details like the trees or bushes or your dad mowing the lawn! If you zoom in too close you will simply see a pixelated screen. If you zoom all the way out you will see all of Planet Earth.

Taking this analogy and applying it to a popular activity like soccer, if you zoomed all the way out you could probably recount your entire soccer journey since your parents first signed you up all the way through to yesterday’s Varsity Team practice. Since maximum word counts are fixed (650 for the Common App Personal Statement), the more you zoom out, the less details you can offer and the less you can dive in deeper or reflect – this means we will learn less about YOU! Zooming all the way in could be compared to describing your favorite soccer ball or cleats like an Amazon product page. In this case 650 words is way too much and there is nothing deep to dive into. Adjusting your zoom intelligently and keeping in mind that the point of this essay is to help the admissions reps learn more about who you are, maybe you focus on the journey towards learning how to perform a bicycle kick or possibly a conversation with a coach that led you to better understand yourself and thus how to improve as a soccer athlete. Conversations (or moments) are great because they serve as anecdotes that do not consume tons of words yet they offer the possibility to dive in and really share a unique fingerprint story with soccer in the background. The story doesn’t even have to be explicitly tied to playing or training for soccer.

In the end, writing a personal statement about a common activity like soccer comes down to authenticity and perspective. It’s not about finding the rarest topic, but about digging deep into your own experiences and sharing the fingerprint moments that have shaped you. Whether it’s learning a challenging skill or technique, a pivotal conversation, or a small but meaningful victory, those moments—and how they affected you and how you reflect on them—offer insight into who you are beyond the surface of the activity. By thoughtfully adjusting your focus and sharing your unique “fingerprint” story, you’ll establish a powerful and profound connection with your reader and reveal the personal journey that sets you apart.

This article was written by Insight’s Co-Founder, Ajit Jain.

 

College Essays: How to Slay Your First Draft?

Things I hear during application season:

“I read a bunch of college essays on ____ site to help me understand what I should be writing.”

“My friend/parent/older sibling told me I should do _____ – is that OK?

And on it goes.

Write College Essays DraftWhy is writing for college applications so very difficult? Why does it stir up so much doubt? Because of fear. Fear of looking silly. Fear of writing the wrong thing. Fear of being REJECTED.

When it comes to college essays, you often feel that the stakes could not be higher.

What should you do? Reframe the task. College admissions officers want to hear what you have to say. They are not out to play “gotcha” – they actually want to get to know you. That’s what your college essays are all about. How can you help them to see the real you? Let’s dive into that first draft!

 

 

How important is your college essay? Check out our post on Why The College Essay Matters

 

brainstorming and plan your college essay contentInsight #1: Channel Your Creativity!

Great writing starts with great…pre-writing. Yes, brainstorming! A simple pen with paper will do. So will sticky notes, or, if you like being able to move, erase, etc. your ideas, I highly recommend using a mind-mapping software (Coggle and Miro are examples). Check your environment – is being at home too distracting? Hit the library or literally take a hike (and bring your notebook with you).

 

 

 

 

Insight #2: Let Your Inner Editor Wait Its Turn

 

let your thoughts flow when you write your college essay draftsIf you are worried about your writing, while you are writing it, this means your editor and writer selves are battling for control. Who is the captain? The editor or the writer? If the answer is “both” that means the boat goes nowhere (“boat” in this metaphor being your draft). When you notice your inner editor interfering, questioning, or otherwise stopping the writing process, try thanking it for showing up and asking it to wait a while until it is time to work. When will that be? AFTER the first draft.

 

Writer’s block? Read more about Overcoming Writers Block

Insight #3: You are Feeling the Pain of Learning How to Write About…You

Quick, grab any adult you know and show them some of these college essay questions. Would they love to answer these? Of course not. They are difficult! So part of this process is learning that the discomfort of learning how to write about yourself doesn’t mean you are “good” or “bad” at it – it just means you are learning.

 

Insight #4: Everyone Can Do A GREAT Job

No matter how you feel about your writing skills, it is highly unlikely that you have written anything like this before. Do you think that my students who have written novels and scripts, or have worked on their school newspapers sailed through the applications process without a care in the world? Nope! If you write well, your fears may be even more pronounced than someone who feels less confident about their writing. Why? Because you know that you can always do a better job.

What if you struggle in English classes? That is also OK. I have worked with students who aren’t native English speakers, and they are still able to express themselves well in their college applications. How??? The fact that the process of writing your college essays is difficult. Keep in mind that your first draft does not predict the later quality of your work. At Insight, we work with students through one draft after the next, and every iteration pushes their college essays toward greatness. Don’t feel discouraged if your first few drafts aren’t perfect. Keep putting one foot in front of the other and making consistent progress – that is what matters!

 

Insight #5: You Are The Expert of Your Life

Lastly, something to remember is that you have had 11 years of people telling you to listen and follow their lead. It can be shocking to realize that colleges want to hear from you. It is a completely different dynamic. My goodness – now someone wants to hear what I have to say? It takes some acclimatization. However strange it may sound, you are actually an expert – on your own life. You are 100% qualified to discuss it.

 

Want more college essay tips? Check out 5 Tips for Your College Essays

 

I hope these college essay insights help you as you move through your drafts this summer/fall. Happy Writing!

 

Need help with your college essays? We are here for you! Schedule a 1-hour personalized college planning session with an Insight Counselor today to learn how we can help you write your college essays!

 


Written by Meilin Obinata

This article was written by Insight Education’s Senior College Admissions Counselor Meilin Obinata.

Meilin Obinata is a Senior College Counselor who enjoys learning from her students. She believes education is a creative endeavor and creates a space that allows students to explore new ideas. As a Bay Area native who grew up in Santa Cruz, she is familiar with the local schools. Read her full bio here.

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